Nov 18 2013

Love Never Fails Chapter 38: Destiny

It has taken me a while to update this time. It wasn’t an easy chapter to write, and it is a bit longer than usual. I hope you will like it, and if you do, please write me a few words. Yes, I need encouragement just like everyone else. Thank you very much!

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7472782/38

The following is the teaser:

The old man thought to himself, it can’t be Paul… no it’s impossible! Didn’t he happily accept my bribe that night?

Just then, a loud knock on the door to Miss McGee’s bedroom brought Mr. McGee back to present. “Master William!” said an excited voice coming from behind that door. “The master key is found!”

Albert’s head jerked up. He cast a surprised glance at his granduncle before he strode through the room to open the door. He was even more astonished when he saw his aunt’s personal maid standing next to the butler, so Albert was inwardly glad that he had got his shirt buttoned up already.

When the maid made a bow to her master, the butler explained, “Master William, Madam Elroy has something important to discuss. She’s waiting for you in her study, and Amy found the master key on her way to this floor.”

His statement startled both the young master and the old guest. First, it was past midnight, and what was so urgent that Madam Elroy had to talk to her nephew at this hour? Yet, this was not the only thing that puzzled Albert, so he raised a valid question, “Does it mean you have probably dropped the key by accident, Mitchell?”

The butler grasped what his master had alluded to. There was a hidden shortcut that connected Madam Elroy’s study to this part of the mansion, so the young master was essentially asking whether the key had not been stolen after all. Yet, the poor butler hung his head low in shame, saying, “I’m not entirely sure about that, Master William, and yes I did take the shortcut just now.”

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    • Aria on November 19, 2013 at 6:53 pm
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    Hello Ms. Puddle,

    Thank you so much for writing this chapter. You know that I am always one of your big fans. I truly admire your skills, effort and passion in writing and drawing. You have even translated your stories in different languages. That’s a wonderful thing. I am so proud of you.

    However, I feel as a reader that the story just tries to do too much and I am feeling unfocused this time. Maybe because there are too many dramas and conflicts going on? Please forgive me if you feel offended by my comment. I honestly don’t mean it in a bad way at all. I think your writing worthwhile and believe in your talent enough to give you this constructive/positive criticism.

    But please don’t stop writing. You have a great talent and I would like to keep encouraging you. I am still looking forward to reading the continuous of LNF and hopefully the ending soon 😉

    Yours Sincerely,

    Aria

    1. Hello Aria! Long time no talk! Glad to hear from you again, and of course I value your constructive criticism! No worries! 🙂 I know what you meant by so many things going on at the same time in the story, but the plot is in my head, and it will unfold in the following chapters. Please bear with me, and hopefully you will soon see the whole picture. Thank you once again for taking the time to write to me, Aria! I appreciate your feedback and continued support!! 😀

    • Angie on November 19, 2013 at 6:10 pm
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    Your drawings are beautiful.

    He estado leyendo diferentes Facfics acerca de Candy y Albert y solamente he encontrado en 2 editores ( Tu y otra escritora) al Albert perfecto.

    Pista : FanFic 90 days. En ese Fanfiction, Albert es caballeroso, apasionado, inteligente, y divertido en algunas ocasiones.

    1. Muchas gracias por leer! 😀 Thank you very much for your kind words even though I’m not entirely sure you meant the Albert character was good in the other fanfic or mine ;). Thank you anyway for writing to me! 🙂

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